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The charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for.

The four pie charts illustrate employment statistics for British mothers of young children. They are organized according to the age of the youngest dependent child, and there are three categories of mother: working full-time, part-time, or not working. Overall. we can see that as their youngest child ages, women are more likely to work outside the home, and to work more hours. Despite this, it is notable that even with their youngest child over the age of 10 the majority of them do not return full-time to their careers. Predictably, carers for infants between 0 and 2 and toddlers between 3 and 4 show the highest rates of unemployment, with 70% and 54% out of work, respectively. Interestingly, the number of these parents with full-time jobs almost doubles between these two age categories, reaching 35% in the latter, while the number working part time remains unchanged, accounting for 11%. As mentioned previously, with regards to mothers of children of school-going age (5-10+), although the majority still opt to stay home for most of the day (52%-55%), just under half are now working full-time (48%-45%).
The four pie charts illustrate employment statistics for British mothers of young children. They
are organized
according to the
age
of the youngest dependent child, and there are three categories of mother: working full-time, part-time, or not working.

Overall
.
we
can
see
that as their youngest child
ages
, women are more likely to work outside the home, and to work more hours. Despite this, it is notable that even with their youngest child over the
age
of 10 the majority of them do not return full-time to their careers.

Predictably
, carers for infants between 0 and 2 and toddlers between 3 and 4
show
the highest rates of unemployment, with 70% and 54% out of work,
respectively
.
Interestingly
, the number of these parents with full-time jobs almost doubles between these two
age
categories, reaching 35% in the latter, while the number working
part time
remains unchanged, accounting for 11%.

As mentioned previously,
with regards to
mothers of children of school-going
age
(5-10+), although the majority
still
opt to stay home for most of the day (52%-55%),
just
under half are
now
working full-time (48%-45%).
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