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The charts below show the results of the survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The our chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of the survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The our chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared. 6q10
The given diagrams depict the adult education search reports. The bar diagram illustrates why the adults prefer to study and the pie diagram shows how the cost of each course should be taken by three group of people. Overall it is clear that, the majority of the adult decided to study because of their interest in subjects and to gain qualifications, and also the individual are most responsible for take up expenses of education. Around 40% of the adult are interested in the subjects and they prefer to study. Almost similar proportion of people decided to study to gain qualification. Only below 10% of people consider education as the way to meet new people. About 12% adult like to change their current job and they decided to get education. Mainly there are three group of people are responsible for paying the expenses for paying the expenses of adult education and major proportion of the education costs are taken up by individual(40%). Employers and tax payers spend 35% and 25% of the total cost of education.
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diagrams depict the adult
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education
search reports. The bar diagram illustrates why the
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adults
prefer to
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study
and the pie diagram
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shows
how the cost of each course should
be taken
by three
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group
of
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people
.

Overall
it is
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clear
that, the majority of the adult decided to
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study
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because
of their interest in subjects and to gain qualifications, and
also
the individual are most responsible for take up expenses of education.

Around 40% of the adult
are interested
in the
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subjects and
they prefer to
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study
. Almost similar proportion of
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people
decided to
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study
to gain qualification.
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Only
below 10% of
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people
consider
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education
as the way to
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meet
new
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people
. About 12% adult like to
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change
their
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current
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job and
they decided to
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get
education.

Mainly
there are three
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group
of
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people
are responsible for paying the expenses for paying the expenses of adult
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education
and major proportion of the
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education
costs
are taken
up by individual(40%). Employers and tax payers spend 35% and 25% of the total cost of
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education
.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the results of the survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The our chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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