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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. EmWq

The charts illustrate the factors which are making people most happy with their percentages. The first chart is about people who are younger than 30 and the second chart is about people over 30 years old. Overall, there are similarities and differences between these two charts. It can be seen that doing hobbies and achievement at work are common factors in each two charts. Both of these factor's percentages are nearly at the same level and they are the largest two factors that making people most happy in two age groups. Turning to the differences between two age groups, having a good appearance is the most important thing to be most happy for 18% of younger people. Also travelling is the another important factor for younger people with 15%. Neither of these two factors are mentioned by older people. Instead, 20% of older people report that having financial security is most important to their happiness and 14% say they feel most happy when they are with their family

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