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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. OqoE
The graph is a study of the number of enquires received by the Tourist Information Office in a city during a period of 6 months in the year 2011. In January, there were about 400 enquiries received in person, 790 enquiries received by letter/email and more than 900 enquiries received via telephone. But, as regards, the number of enquiries received in person kept on rising in the month of February, March, April and May being highest in June with more than 1850 enquiries. With regards to enquiries received through letter/email, there was a gradual dropdown in its graph with the lowest enquiries of less than 400. As far as the enquiries by the telephone are concerned, in the month of February, it was 800, in March and April it was raised to 1000, and 1400 and 1600 in the month of May and June respectively. Thus it can be concluded that the most number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office was in person.
The graph is a study of the number of
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by the Tourist Information Office in a city during a period of 6
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in the year 2011. In January, there were about 400
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in person, 790
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by letter/email and more than 900
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received
via telephone.
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received
in person
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on rising in the
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month
of February, March, April and May being highest in June with more than 1850
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enquiries
.
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
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received
through letter/email, there was a gradual dropdown in its graph with the lowest
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enquiries
of less than 400. As far as the
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enquiries
by the telephone
are concerned
, in the
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month
of February, it was 800, in March and April it
was raised
to 1000, and 1400 and 1600 in the
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month
of May and June
respectively
.
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be concluded
that the most number of
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by the Tourist Information Office was in person.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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