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The charts below show the banana export in 1993 and 2003, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each banana in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the banana export in 1993 and 2003, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each banana in 2003. GYOj
The line graph compares the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany and USA over a period of 8 years. Overall, banana was the costliest for the given period in Japan, whereas, bananas were the cheapest for the same period in USA. In addition, the cost of bananas in Germany and Japan increased, but remained unchanged in France. In 1996, in Japan and France, bananas were sold at 2 USD/kg but the cost of bananas in Germany and USA was 1. 5 USD/kg and 1 USD/kg respectively. For the next two years there was a rapid increase from 2 USD/kg to 3 USD/kg in Japan. Meanwhile France remained stable and a slight increment of 0. 25 USD/kg was shown by Germany and USA. From 1998 to 2004, the price of banana in USA was constant with 1. 25 USD/kg but all other countries showed variations. By 2004, the cost of bananas in Japan was 2. 5 USD/kg, France USD/ kg and Germany 1. 75 USD/kg.
The line graph compares the price of banana in
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Japan
, France, Germany and USA over a period of 8 years.
Overall
, banana was the costliest for the
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given
period in
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Japan
, whereas, bananas were the cheapest for the same period
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in USA
.
In addition
, the cost of bananas in Germany and
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Japan
increased,
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but
remained unchanged in France. In 1996, in
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Japan
and France, bananas
were sold
at 2 USD/kg
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but
the cost of bananas in Germany and USA was 1. 5 USD/kg and 1 USD/kg
respectively
. For the
next
two years there was a rapid increase from 2 USD/kg to 3 USD/kg in
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Japan
.
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Meanwhile
France remained stable and a slight increment of 0. 25 USD/kg
was shown
by Germany and USA. From 1998 to 2004, the price of banana
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in USA
was constant with 1. 25 USD/kg
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but
all other countries
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showed
variations. By 2004, the cost of bananas in
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Japan
was 2. 5 USD/kg, France USD/ kg and Germany 1. 75 USD/kg.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the banana export in 1993 and 2003, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each banana in 2003.

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