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The chart below shows the spending by 18 to 20 years old in one country on five different products in 2010 and 2014.

The chart below shows the spending by 18 to 20 years old in one country on five different products in 2010 and 2014. ppqd
The provided graph represent the information about the spent amount on food, clothes, books, smartphones, and toiletries between the age 18 to 20 years old during the period 2010 and 2014. Overall, it can be seen that the highest amount was spent on the food in both years. Whereas the money spent on the clothes equal in the both years. In 2010, the age 18 to 20 years old spent amount 3700millions on food, whereas the 2500million spent on the clothes. Smartphones and toiletries accounted for about 2000million spent each. The least amount was spent on the books 1000million. In the next four years, the spent amount on food, smartphones, toiletries increased compared to the year 2010. about 4300million were spent on food. Whereas 2700millions were spent on the smartphones. The amount was spent on the toiletries it was 100 million increased compare to the year 2010. The spending on book become nearly half. Lastly the amount spent on clothes remained unchanged at 2500millions
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during the period 2010 and 2014.

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in both years. Whereas the money
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equal in the both years.

In 2010, the age 18 to 20 years
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on the books 1000million.

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IELTS academic The chart below shows the spending by 18 to 20 years old in one country on five different products in 2010 and 2014.

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