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The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two countries in 2019.

The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two countries in 2019. lBGK
Given are two pie charts describing the generation of electricity in Germany and France in 2009. The first chart provided indicates the percentage of three electricity types, namely nuclear, conventional thermal and renewables, while the second chart concentrates on the different sorts of renewable energy. It is apparent from the data that in Germany conventional thermal energy had a distinct prevalence with 59. 6% in comparison to 23% of energy generated by nuclear power and 17. 4% generated by renewables respectively. Conversely, nuclear energy is the first in terms of electricity generation with its 76% in France. In France, most of the renewable energy came from the hydroelectricity that made up 80. 5%, while the smallest amount of 0/9% of the renewable was generated by the solar sources. However, in Germany there was no sheer clear prevalence with both biomass and wind making up approximately a third of overall renewable energy in the country. Overall, Germany generated 50 billions kWh more than France in the year in question.
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two pie charts describing the generation of electricity in Germany and France in 2009. The
first
chart provided indicates the percentage of three electricity types,
namely
nuclear, conventional thermal and
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renewables
, while the second chart concentrates on the
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different
sorts of
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renewable
energy.

It is apparent from the data that in Germany conventional thermal
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energy
had a distinct prevalence with 59. 6%
in comparison
to 23% of
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energy
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generated
by nuclear power and 17. 4%
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generated
by
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renewables
respectively
.
Conversely
, nuclear
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energy
is the
first
in terms of electricity generation with its 76% in France.

In France, most of the
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renewable
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energy
came from the hydroelectricity that made up 80. 5%, while the smallest amount of 0/9% of the
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renewable
was
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generated
by the solar sources.
However
, in Germany there was no sheer
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clear
prevalence with both biomass and wind making up approximately a third of
overall
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renewable
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energy
in the country.

Overall
, Germany
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generated
50 billions kWh more than France in the year in question.
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two countries in 2019.

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