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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029 j0Xw
The table illustrates five industries as a percentage of Brail’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a presumption for 2029. The percentage of five industries were significantly fluctuated during the period. In 2009, finance industry had the highest percentage in Brazil’s economy, while food processing sector had the lowest percentage at 10 percent. Manufacturing business’s percentage share was 20 percent. Meanwhile, tourism and oil, coal and gas sector had the same percentage share in Brail’s economy at 25 percent. In 2019, finance and oil sectors’ percentage rose notably to more than 35 percent and 30 percent, respectively. Likewise, food processing business’s shares surged sharply to 20 percent. However, manufacturing and tourism industry’s percentage dropped gradually to 15 percent and 20 percent, consecutively. For 2029 forecast, finance sector’s share will continue to steadily increase to 40 percent. Still, tourism business’s percentage is forecasted to remain the same as 2019 percentage. Meanwhile, it is predicted that there will be significant downward trends in other industries’ percentage, especially in manufacturing business.
The table illustrates five
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of
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Brail
’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a presumption for 2029. The
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percentage
of five
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industries
were
significantly
fluctuated during the period.

In 2009, finance
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industry
had the highest
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percentage
in Brazil’s economy, while food processing
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sector
had the lowest
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percentage
at 10
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percent
. Manufacturing business’s
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percentage
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share
was 20
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percent
. Meanwhile, tourism and oil, coal and gas
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sector
had the same
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percentage
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share
in
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Brail
’s economy at 25 percent.

In 2019, finance and oil
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sectors’
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percentage
rose
notably
to more than 35
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percent
and 30
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percent
,
respectively
.
Likewise
, food processing business’s
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surged
sharply
to 20
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percent
.
However
, manufacturing and tourism
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industry’s
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percentage
dropped
gradually
to 15
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percent
and 20
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percent
,
consecutively
.

For 2029 forecast, finance
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sector’s
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share
will continue to
steadily
increase to 40
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percent
.
Still
, tourism business’s
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percentage
is forecasted
to remain the same as 2019
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percentage
. Meanwhile, it
is predicted
that there will be significant downward trends in other
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industries’
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percentage
,
especially
in manufacturing business.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029

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