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the charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for

Initially, around seven in ten by mother are not working to take care and guide the youngest dependent child 0-2 years, while 19% mother working full-time, and mother are working part-time has a minority, they are taking care of their children and have a job. Meanwhile, dominated charts of the youngest dependent child 3-4 years are mother not working at 54%, while more than a third mother are working full-time. However, mother chose working part-time for make ends meet, accounting 11%. Furthermore, nearly a half of mother are working full-time beside the age of their child around 5-9 years, while 38% mother are not working, because in this aged children have spend more time with their mother for teach children, while a minority mother are working part-time. However, more than two fifths mother working full-time, mostly at ages 10 years+ children can taking care of themselves, while 29% and 26% mother are working part-time and not working. Overall, most mother are not working when they have a children aged around 0-4 years, and mother prefer to working full-time when the child aged 5-10+ years.
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and have a job. Meanwhile, dominated charts of the youngest dependent
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IELTS academic the charts above show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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