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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. PG9d
The pie charts given repersents the information related to the phone usage among the teenagers from an survey conducted in one of a African county between 2016 and 2019. The measurement unit is percentage. Overall, as the reach of internet increased enormously, usage of social media platform also increased in the same manner. Through the year from 2016 to 2019 a steady rasie can bve seen in the social media activity. On the contrary, if we look into the ideal purpose for which phones were discovered on the first place i. e. phone calls had been decreased over the same tenure. To begin with, lets look into the development of social media activity. First of all, in year 2016, social networks was a reason for 50% of teenager to use the cellular devices. However, slight dip can be observed in the year 2017 as percentage drop by 2%. Adding on, the rise of social media did not stop there as usage increased in the year 2018 by becoming 21% and 56% in 2019. Furthermore, lets check the other reasons where phones were least used. Primarily, phone were discovered so that people could communicate quickly with each other by mean of phone calls. To continue, phone calls usage among teenager decreased over the time as 13% of usage in year 2017 was the best performance. Like phone calls, Emails had a same fate as usage of email decrease at steady rate from 2016 to 2019. In 2016, email usage was on 25 % and it drop to 19 % in 2019.
The pie charts
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usage
among the
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teenagers
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African county between 2016 and 2019. The measurement unit is percentage.

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, as the reach of internet increased
enormously
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usage
of
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social
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media
platform
also
increased in the same manner. Through the
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year
from 2016 to 2019 a steady
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rasie
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activity.
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, if we look into the ideal purpose for which
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phones
were discovered
on the
first
place
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phone
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had
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activity.
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, in
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year
2016,
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social
networks was a reason for 50% of
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teenager
to
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use
the cellular devices.
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, slight dip can
be observed
in the
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year
2017 as percentage drop by 2%. Adding on, the rise of
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social
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media
did not
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there as
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increased in the
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2018 by becoming 21% and 56% in 2019.

Furthermore
,
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the other reasons where
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were least
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.
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phone
were discovered
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that
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people
could communicate
quickly
with each other by mean of
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phone
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calls
. To continue,
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phone
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calls
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usage
among
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teenager
decreased over the time as 13% of
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in
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2017 was the best performance. Like
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phone
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calls
, Emails had a same fate as
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of email decrease at steady rate from 2016 to 2019. In 2016, email
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was on 25 % and it
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drop
to 19 % in 2019.

IELTS academic The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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