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The chart shows the place of birth of the population in Australia

The chart shows the place of birth of the population in Australia eEK0O
The pie chart illustrates the birth place of the Australian dwellers while the table shows where these people live, either in cities or rural areas. The counts are given in the percentage. Overall, the most of the people who live in Australia has the same birth place that is Australia itself whereas Netherlands has the least population in Australia. Meanwhile, major population live in the cities than the rural areas. Firstly, other countries has the second high count, 14% following Australians 74% and UK has half of the percentage of other countries. Whereas, New Zealand, Netherland, China contribute only 3%, 2%and 1% respectively to the pie chart. As you can see from the table, large no of Chinese people are settled in the urban area almost 99%followed by Netherland and UK. The people from the New Zealand and Australia are the highly settled in rural area about 20%.
The pie chart illustrates the birth place of the Australian dwellers while the table
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where these
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people
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live
, either in cities or rural
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areas
. The counts are
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in the percentage.

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, the most of the
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people
who
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in Australia has the same birth place
that is
Australia itself whereas Netherlands has the least population in Australia. Meanwhile, major population
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live
in the cities than the rural
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.
Firstly
, other countries has the
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second high
count, 14% following Australians 74% and UK has half of the percentage of other countries. Whereas, New Zealand,
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Netherland
, China contribute
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only
3%, 2%and 1%
respectively
to the pie chart.

As you can
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from the table, large
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no
of Chinese
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people
are settled
in the urban
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area
almost 99%followed by
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Netherland
and UK. The
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people
from the New Zealand and Australia are the
highly
settled in rural
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about 20%.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the place of birth of the population in Australia

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  American English
3 paragraphs
148 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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