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The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. GMLDL

The pie charts depicts how using a various means of transportation for commuting to university or work varied from 2004 to 2009 in the Australia. In the year 2004, as regards bicycle, it accounted for 9%, and experienced almost 2 times fold rise to 16% in the year 2009. As regards bus, it comprised of 33% in 2004, which increased to 46 % in 2009. The initial figure for train was 3% and incline of 1% was observed at the end. According to cars, which had the ratio of 51% in the beginning, fell to 28% in 2009. n contrast, walking witnessed that 2% rise from 4% to 6% in the given time period. As well as car parking had been changed by university in 2008. In conclusion, it can be observed that the most significant rise was noticed that in the cars which presented downward trend as compared to bicycle, it represented upward trend in the given five years period.

The pie charts depicts how using a various means of transportation for commuting to university or work varied from 2004 to 2009 in the Australia.

In the year 2004, as regards bicycle, it accounted for 9%, and experienced almost 2 times fold rise to 16% in the year 2009. As regards bus, it comprised of 33% in 2004, which increased to 46 % in 2009. The initial figure for train was 3% and incline of 1% was observed
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end
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According to cars, which had the ratio of 51% in the beginning, fell to 28% in 2009. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterN
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 contrast, walking witnessed that 2% rise from 4% to 6% in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 time period. As well
 as car parking had been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 by university in 2008.

In conclusion
, it can be observed
 that the most significant rise was noticed
 that in the cars which presented downward trend as compared to bicycle, it represented upward trend in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 five years period. 

IELTS academic The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

161 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

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