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The below map shows how two places have developed in three different time periods

The below map shows how two places have developed in three different time periods OlXeN
The map illustrates how Meadowside village and Fonton a neighbouring town got developed in three different time periods (1962, 1985 and now). Overall Meadowside village has increased its size and became Meadowside suburb. Furthermore there had a significant development in the housing, infrastructure, and the transportation facilities. Firstly in the year 1962 the Meadowside village don’t have proper main roads and hence doesn’t even had good transportation facilities. The Fonton town had only railway facilities running to the North. Then in 1985, visible changes had happened to Meadowside village. Housing Estates were built and leisure complex were developed and even a super store is available for the people to buy necessary groceries. Secondly the road facilities were also upgraded to the village and, a road has been built to connect Fonton to Meadowside village. Recently Meadowside has become a suburb of the Fonton town and, other railway route was also built to expand the transportation facilities. Finally hotels and business park facilities were also available due to the development that has occurred.
The map illustrates how
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Meadowside
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village
and
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Fonton
a
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neighbouring
town
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got
developed in three
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different
time periods (1962, 1985 and
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now
).

Overall
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Meadowside
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village
has increased its size and became
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Meadowside
suburb.
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Furthermore
there had a significant development in the housing, infrastructure, and the transportation facilities.

Firstly
in the year 1962 the
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Meadowside
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village
don’t have proper main roads and
hence
doesn’t even
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had
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good
transportation facilities. The
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Fonton
town had
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only
railway facilities running to the North.

Then in 1985, visible
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changes
had happened to
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Meadowside
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village
. Housing Estates
were built
and leisure complex
were developed
and even a super store is available for the
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people
to
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buy
necessary groceries.
Secondly
the road facilities were
also
upgraded to the
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village
and, a road has
been built
to connect
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Fonton
to
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Meadowside
village.

Recently
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Meadowside
has become a suburb of the
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Fonton
town and, other railway route was
also
built to expand the transportation facilities.
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Finally
hotels and business park facilities were
also
available due to the development that has occurred.
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