Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. oR88V
The bar chart depicts information about number of British people migrate to five countries over the period of 2004 to 2007. Looking from overall perspective, it is apparent that throughout time frame, the most favoured destination to move was Australia. The countries accepting the most British were Australia and Spain with a former commencing at over 40. 000 in 2004 whereas Spain stand as around 34. 000. However in 2005, the trend in Australia declined slightly and in following year it jumped over fifty thousand and a fall back to around 44. 000 by the end of the period. In contrast, the figure in Spain, started at approximately 34. 000, rose significiantly the next year and then declined steadily to finish at under 30. 000 in 2007. The other countries generally remained below 30. 000 British emigrants, begining with New Zealand which decreased steeply and pattern for USA was flactuated where in 2 year frame (in 2004 and in 2006) the number of people migrated was the same ( over 20. 000). In France, there was a sharp uptick of 10. 000 emigrants to 33. 000 in the first year and it followed by a precipitous fall to under 20. 000, which was the lowest figure for all nations.
The bar chart depicts information about number of British
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
migrate to five countries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
the period of 2004 to 2007.

Looking from
overall
perspective, it is apparent that throughout time frame, the most
Possible spelling mistake. 'favoured' is British English.
favoured
destination to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
was Australia.

The countries accepting the most British were Australia and Spain with a former commencing at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
40. 000 in 2004 whereas Spain stand as around 34. 000.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
in 2005, the trend in Australia declined
slightly
and in following
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
it jumped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
fifty thousand and a fall back to around 44. 000 by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the period.
In contrast
, the figure in Spain,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
at approximately 34. 000, rose
Possible spelling mistake found.
significiantly
the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
and then declined
steadily
to finish at under 30. 000 in 2007.

The other countries
generally
remained below 30. 000 British emigrants,
Possible spelling mistake found.
begining
with New Zealand which decreased
steeply
and pattern
A determiner is probably missing here: "for the USA".
for USA
was
Possible spelling mistake found.
flactuated
where in 2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
frame (in 2004 and in 2006) the number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
migrated was the same
Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis
(
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
20. 000). In France, there was a sharp uptick of 10. 000 emigrants to 33. 000 in the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
and it followed by a precipitous fall to under 20.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
000
, which was the lowest figure for all nations.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.