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The chart show the percentage of secondary school students at a school in the UK taking different subjects in 1995 and this year.and

The chart show the percentage of secondary school students at a school in the UK taking different subjects in 1995 and this year. and E3WDQ
The report compares the proportion of pupils in secondary school in UK how they choose various subjects in the year of 1995 and current year. Overall, RS and Drama subject is disappears in present year and IT subject introduced. However, in another subjects there is a little change. In 1995, more than one fourth was taking history, whereas It decreased to 25% in current year. While, in Geography former students were 21%, and it increased by 23% in this year. Furthermore, 15% pupils taken arts subject, then it decline to 8% at present year. Some change is noticed in these proportion Since the RS subject students was 9% and in Drama 12% in 1995 but instead of this two subjects there is IT subject introduced which is 27%. Lastly, Business percentage remain constant 16%. The highest proportion has IT subject from all subjects.
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. While, in Geography former students were 21%, and it increased by 23% in this
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.
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, then it
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to 8% at present year.

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introduced which is 27%.
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