Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

THE CHART ON THE LEFT SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF BRITISH ADULTS DRINKING MORE THAN THE RECOMMENDED GUIDELINES ON AT LEAST ONE DAY IN THE WEEK IN 2001.

THE CHART ON THE LEFT SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF BRITISH ADULTS DRINKING MORE THAN THE RECOMMENDED GUIDELINES ON AT LEAST ONE DAY IN THE WEEK IN 2001. qa1Md
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT HOW MUCH AVERAGE OF BRITISH MEN AND WOMEN DRINKING MORE ALCOHOL ONE DAY IN THE WEEK OVER A PERIOD OF 2001. OVERALL, IT IS MANIFEST FROM THE BAR CHART THAT THE RATIO OF MEN DRINKING ALCOHOL WAS THE HIGHEST, WHEREAS THE RATIO OF WOMEN WAS THE LOWEST THROUGHOUT THE GIVEN PERIOD. INITIATING AT 47% MEN 16-24 AGE GROUP MORE DRINKING ALCOHOL WHILE WOMEN 16-24 AGE GROUP ONLY 39% MORE DRINKING ALCOHOL. HOWEVER WOMEN 25-44 AGE GROUP IS 28% DRINKING ALCOHOL SIMILARLY MEN VALUE OF DRINKING ALCOHOL MORE THAN TO WOMEN CONSEQUENTLY, 48% MEN DRINKING ALCOHOL. 3RD AGE GROUP IS 45-64. MOREOVER, WOMEN JUST 20% DRINKING ALCOHOL AND MEN QUANTITY OF DRINKING ALCOHOL HIGH THAN TO WOMEN SO THAT THE 38% MEN MORE DRINKING ONE DAY IN THE WEEK OF 2001. LAST AGE GROUP IS 65 AND OVER. NONETHELESS, THE NUMERAL OF WOMEN 65 AND OVER AGE GROUP IS IMMENSELY DECLINE TO ONLY 5% AND MEN NUMBER OF DRINKING ALCOHOL EXTREMELY GROW TO WOMEN EVEN SO, THE 20% MEN AGE GROUP MORE DRINKING ALCOHOL ONE DAY OF THE WEEK IN 2001.
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT HOW MUCH AVERAGE OF BRITISH
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
AND
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
MORE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
ONE DAY IN THE WEEK OVER A PERIOD OF 2001.
OVERALL
, IT IS MANIFEST FROM THE BAR CHART THAT THE RATIO OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
WAS THE HIGHEST, WHEREAS THE RATIO OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
WAS THE LOWEST THROUGHOUT THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GIVEN
PERIOD. INITIATING AT 47%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
16-24
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
MORE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
WHILE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
16-24
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ONLY
39% MORE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
HOWEVER
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
25-44
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
IS 28%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
SIMILARLY
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
VALUE OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
MORE THAN TO
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
CONSEQUENTLY
, 48%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
. 3RD
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
IS 45-64.
MOREOVER
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
JUST
20%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
AND
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
QUANTITY OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
Use "higher" to make a comparison with this adjective.
HIGH
THAN TO
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SO
THAT THE 38%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
MORE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
ONE DAY IN THE WEEK OF 2001. LAST
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
IS 65 AND OVER. NONETHELESS, THE NUMERAL OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
65 AND OVER
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
IS
IMMENSELY
DECLINE TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ONLY
5% AND
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
NUMBER OF
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
EXTREMELY
GROW TO
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
WOMEN
EVEN
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SO
, THE 20%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
MEN
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
AGE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
GROUP
MORE
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
DRINKING
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ALCOHOL
ONE DAY OF THE WEEK IN 2001.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic THE CHART ON THE LEFT SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF BRITISH ADULTS DRINKING MORE THAN THE RECOMMENDED GUIDELINES ON AT LEAST ONE DAY IN THE WEEK IN 2001.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
187 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts