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The chart illustrates the percentage of recruitment language-teacher who taught English and French in Canada between 2001 to 2007. Overall, at the first of period both English and French teachers had almost same chance for employment, the chance of getting job for English teacher had reduction trend over the years. In contrast, after a decrease in the first year, for next years the chance of recruitment of French-language teacher became increasing. At 2001 about 72% of teachers who searched for job could find occupation in English-language teaching. During the next two years, the chance of employment fall to 40%. After 2003 the direction of trend has changed to upward and go up slightly to 45%. The chance of recruitment dropped from 45% in 2005 to 32% in 2006 which was a significantly fall in one year. In the next year the rate of slumping decrease and fell to under 30% (about 28%). The French-language teachers who searched for job in 2001 had 70% chance to finding work in Canada. In the next year the chance of recruitment went down to 52%. In the other hand, in 2003 the teachers had more chance to finding occupation despite of 2002. From 2003 to 2005 the trend did not have a considerable change and increase slightly from 68% to 70%. Then in 2004 trend went down to 68% and again it rose to 75% in 2007.
The chart illustrates the percentage of
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language-teacher who taught English and French in Canada
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between 2001 to 2007
.

Overall
, at the
first
of period both English and French
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teachers
had almost same chance for employment, the chance of getting job for English
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teacher
had reduction
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trend
over the years.
In contrast
, after a decrease in the
first
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year
, for
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next
years the chance of
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recruitment
of French-language
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teacher
became increasing.

At 2001 about 72% of
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teachers
who searched for job could find occupation in English-language teaching. During the
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next
two years, the chance of employment fall to 40%. After 2003 the direction of
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trend
has
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changed
to upward and go up
slightly
to 45%. The chance of
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recruitment
dropped from 45% in 2005 to 32% in 2006 which was a
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significantly fall
in one
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year
. In the
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next
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year
the rate of slumping decrease and fell to under 30% (about 28%).

The French-language
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teachers
who searched for job in 2001 had 70% chance to finding work in Canada. In the
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next
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year
the chance of
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recruitment
went down to 52%. In the other hand, in 2003 the
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teachers
had more chance to finding occupation
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despite of
2002. From 2003 to 2005 the
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trend
did not have a considerable
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change
and increase
slightly
from 68% to 70%. Then in 2004
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went down to 68% and again it rose to 75% in 2007.
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