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These data sources clearly communicate that the spread consumption of margarine, low fat - reduced spreads and butter during the period from 1981 to 2007

These data sources clearly communicate that the spread consumption of margarine, low fat - reduced spreads and butter during the period from 1981 to 2007 Aw3KX
AS CAN BE SEEN FROM THE CHART, there was a decelerate in 3 charts. In addition, Butter experienced that it was the lowest figure though the term. In 1982, The butter lead in terms witnessed the number of consumption which was over 140 grams, followed by the Margarine with roughly 90 grams. In 10-year's time, with the witnessing the dramatic plummet from reaching a peak at 160 in 1986 to 100grams, During this time the amount of margarine was 100grams, after having a slightly slummed to 80grams in 1986. With regards to the data of consumption, Following a year period of stability from 1991 to 1996, Margarine having a dramatic slummed 100 grams to roughly 80 grams in the last of the period. Followed by, the butter after it experienced moderately decelerate to approximately 50 grams in the last of the period. noticeably the appearance low fat and reduced spreads which Followed by a growth pattern, started its rising trajectory, reaching a peak at over 80 grams in 2001, prior to having a slightly slummed by 10grams in the last of the term
AS CAN BE
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SEEN
FROM THE CHART, there was
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a decelerate
in 3 charts.
In addition
, Butter experienced that it was the lowest figure though the term.

In 1982, The butter lead in terms witnessed the number of consumption which was over 140
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grams
, followed by the Margarine with roughly 90
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grams
.
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In
10-year's time, with the witnessing the dramatic plummet from reaching a peak at 160 in 1986 to
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100grams
, During this time the amount of margarine was
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100grams
, after having a
slightly
slummed to
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80grams
in 1986.

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With regards to
the data of consumption, Following a year period of stability from 1991 to 1996, Margarine having a dramatic slummed 100
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grams
to roughly 80
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grams
in the last of the period. Followed by, the butter after it experienced
moderately
decelerate to approximately 50
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grams
in the last of the period.
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noticeably
the appearance low
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fat
and
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reduced
spreads which Followed by a growth pattern,
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started
its rising trajectory, reaching a peak at over 80
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grams
in 2001, prior to having a
slightly
slummed by
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10grams
in the last of the
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term
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IELTS academic These data sources clearly communicate that the spread consumption of margarine, low fat - reduced spreads and butter during the period from 1981 to 2007

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182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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