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The chart illustrates the amount of sales various kinds of digital games made from 2000 to 2006 globally. Units are given in $bn.

The chart illustrates the amount of sales various kinds of digital games made from 2000 to 2006 globally. Units are given in $bn. Vy5rm
Overall, handheld games and console games were the first ones, handheld grew steadily whereas Console games declined. Mobile and online games started in 2001 and 2002 respectively and saw a tremendous increase. Console games saw a fall in its global sales to around half from where they were at just under 6$bn in 2000 to around 3$bn in 2006. Handheld gaming had a steady growth, starting from almost 11$bn to finishing just under 18$bn in 2006. Starting in 2001, online games saw a 10 times increase in their sales globally with their final year sales at around 10$bn. Mobile gaming starting growing in 2002 and was neck to neck with online games in 2004 after which it increased more than online gaming in the following year to end at just around 7$bn in the final year.
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declined. Mobile and
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a tremendous increase.

Console
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games
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a fall in its global sales to
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half from where they were at
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under
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3$
bn in 2006. Handheld gaming had a steady growth, starting from almost
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11$
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bn in 2006.

Starting in 2001,
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online
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games
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saw
a 10 times increase in their sales globally with their final year sales at
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around
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10$
bn. Mobile gaming starting growing in 2002 and was neck to neck with
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online
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games
in 2004 after which it increased more than
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online
gaming in the following year to
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IELTS academic The chart illustrates the amount of sales various kinds of digital games made from 2000 to 2006 globally. Units are given in $bn.

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