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THE BAR CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF MEN AND WOMEN IN EMPLOYMENT IN THREE COUNTRIES IN 2005 AND 2015.

THE BAR CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF MEN AND WOMEN IN EMPLOYMENT IN THREE COUNTRIES IN 2005 AND 2015. MqdBq
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT HOW MUCH AVERAGE OF MALE AND FEMALE EMPLOYMENT IN 3 DIFFERENT COUNTRIES OVER A PERIOD OF 10 YEARS. OVERALL, IT IS MANIFEST FROM THE BAR CHART THAT THE RATIO OF FEMALE EMPLOYMENT WAS THE HIGHEST, WHEREAS THE RATIO OF MALE EMPLOYMENT WAS THE LOWEST THROUGHOUT THE GIVEN PERIOD. INITIATING AT 39% CANADA'S WOMEN EMPLOYMENT IN 2005 WHILE VALUE OF MEN EMPLOYMENT HIGH THAN TO WOMEN BY 60%. SIMILARLY, 73% SOUTH KOREAN MALE EMPLOYMENT AND ONLY 30% FEMALE EMPLOYMENT IN 2005. ALTHOUGH 78% SWEDEN MALE EMPLOYMENT AND 44% SWEDEN FEMALE EMPLOYMENT IN 2005. NEXT YEAR IN 2015, THE QUANTITY OF CANADA'S MALE EMPLOYMENT INCREASE TO 70% WHILE CANADA'S WOMEN EMPLOYMENT RATE GROW BY 55% IN 2015. HOWEVER, THE AVERAGE OF FEMALE SOUTH KOREAN EMPLOYMENT SLOWLY RISE TO 35% AND MALE PROPORTION OF EMPLOYMENT SLIGHTLY ELEVATION BY 78% IN 2015. LAST COUNTRY IS SWEDEN. MOREOVER, THE NUMERAL OF SWEDEN MALE EMPLOYMENT DECLINE TO 70% COMPARABLY, FEMALE QUANTITY OF EMPLOYMENT EXTENSION BY 50% IN 2015.
THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION ABOUT HOW MUCH AVERAGE OF MALE AND
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DIFFERENT
COUNTRIES OVER A PERIOD OF 10 YEARS.
OVERALL
, IT IS MANIFEST FROM THE BAR CHART THAT THE RATIO OF
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WAS THE HIGHEST, WHEREAS THE RATIO OF MALE
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WAS THE LOWEST THROUGHOUT THE
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GIVEN
PERIOD. INITIATING AT 39% CANADA'S WOMEN
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IN 2005 WHILE VALUE OF
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HIGH
THAN TO WOMEN BY 60%.
SIMILARLY
, 73% SOUTH KOREAN MALE
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IN 2005. ALTHOUGH 78% SWEDEN MALE
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AND 44% SWEDEN
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IN 2005.
NEXT
YEAR IN 2015, THE QUANTITY OF CANADA'S MALE
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INCREASE TO 70% WHILE CANADA'S WOMEN
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RATE GROW BY 55% IN 2015.
HOWEVER
, THE AVERAGE OF
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SOUTH KOREAN
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SLOWLY
RISE TO 35% AND MALE PROPORTION OF
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EMPLOYMENT
SLIGHTLY
ELEVATION BY 78% IN 2015. LAST COUNTRY IS SWEDEN.
MOREOVER
, THE NUMERAL OF SWEDEN MALE
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DECLINE TO 70%
COMPARABLY
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QUANTITY OF
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EXTENSION BY 50% IN 2015.
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