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The chart illustrates some different kinds of transportation which enrolled in Australia in three separated periods of time in 2010, 2012, and 2014.

The chart illustrates some different kinds of transportation which enrolled in Australia in three separated periods of time in 2010, 2012, and 2014. O6gE3
The chart illustrates some different kinds of transportation which enrolled in Australia in three separated periods of time in 2010, 2012, and 2014. Overall, an upward trend was seen in this chart. The number of passenger vehicles always peaked at 13. 000. 000 in three years. In contrast with this impressive number, the figure for motorcycles had a big change when soared remarkably at 30, 8% from 2010 to 2014. First of all, the number of passenger and commercial transportation constituted the highest number which is registered. With the number 11. 800. 000 in 2010, and surged steadily at 13 000 000 in 2014. Likewise, the number of commercial transportation ascended continually at 500 in 2014. Then, the number of motorcycles and heavy trucks just increased slightly at nearly 170, 32 in 2014. Last but not least, the amount of light trucks hit a low of the chat which only had 106. 000 vehicles in 2010 and 131. 000 vehicles in 2014. Secondly, the big concern is the percentage of change is erratic in five different parts. We can easily saw the percentage nt of motorcycles increased remarkably at 30. 8%, follow then is the percentage of light trucks with 23. 5 percent. Whereas the number of pasesenger vehicles and commercial transportation reached the highest but only changed 10. 2% an 17. 4% to 2014. And at the bottom of the rank is the heavy truck with only 8. 3%.
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which enrolled in Australia in three separated periods of time in 2010, 2012, and 2014.

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, an upward trend was
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seen
in this chart. The
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number
of passenger
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vehicles
always peaked at 13. 000. 000 in three years.
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with this impressive
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, the figure for motorcycles had a
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big
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change
when soared
remarkably
at 30, 8% from 2010 to 2014.

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, the
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of passenger and commercial
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transportation
constituted the highest
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which
is registered
. With the
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11. 800. 000 in 2010, and surged
steadily
at 13 000 000 in 2014.
Likewise
, the
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of commercial
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ascended
continually
at 500 in 2014. Then, the
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of motorcycles and heavy
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trucks
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increased
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at
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170, 32 in 2014. Last
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not least, the amount of light
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trucks
hit a low of the chat which
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had 106. 000
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in 2010 and 131. 000
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in 2014.

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, the
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is erratic in five
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of motorcycles increased
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at 30. 8%, follow then is the percentage of light
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with 23. 5 percent. Whereas the
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pasesenger
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and commercial
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reached the highest
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changed
10. 2% an 17. 4% to 2014. And at the bottom of the rank is the heavy
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truck
with
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only
8. 3%.
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IELTS academic The chart illustrates some different kinds of transportation which enrolled in Australia in three separated periods of time in 2010, 2012, and 2014.

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