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The chart illustrates how many hybrid vehicles are sailed on the world from 2006 to 2009.

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The chart illustrates how many hybrid vehicles are sailed on the world from 2006 to 2009. First three years (2006, 2007 and 2008), the US showed the highest sales (250. 000, 350. 000 and around 320. 000 respectively) compared to Japan and other countries. In these years, Japan and other countries’ levels seemed almost same ranges. In 2006, they were around 60. 000 sales and then they had a slight increase which are around 70. 000 (Japan) and 80. 000 (other). From 2007 to 2008, while the US had a little decrease (310. 000), Japan and other countries continued the rise and reached 90. 000 (Japan) and 10. 000(other). In 2009, countries had the biggest sales numbers, except the US. Japan dramatically peaked at 330. 000 sales, others reached at 120. 000 sales. However, the US slightly dropped at 280. 000 sales. Overall, the biggest total sales showed in the 2009 and it is true twice bigger than the number of total sales in2006. Besides, while the US had a fluctuation over the given period, Japan rose and jumped at the top.
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on the world from 2006 to 2009.

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the highest
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(250. 000, 350. 000 and around 320.
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and
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. In these years,
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and
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levels seemed almost same ranges. In 2006, they were around 60. 000
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sales and
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(Japan)
and 80.
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000
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. From 2007 to 2008, while the US had a
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decrease (310. 000),
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and
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continued the rise and reached 90. 000
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and 10.
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In 2009,
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had the biggest
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numbers, except the US.
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dramatically
peaked at 330. 000
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, others reached at 120. 000
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dropped at 280. 000 sales.

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in the 2009 and it is true twice bigger than the number of total
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in2006.
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rose and jumped at the top.
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