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The chart graph compares figure for the sales of five different of jam

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The chart graph compares figure for the sales of five different of jam by strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry and plum from 2009 to 2014. Overall, it is clear that the quantity of strawberry was by far highest during the research period. Additionally, while plum declined, the figures for raspberry, grape and cherry all increased. In 2009, the number of strawberry jam was highest, at more than 3 million, while the figure for cherry was significantly lower, at 2 million. At the same time, there were less than 3 million of raspberry. the quantity of grape was nearly 1 million compared to fewer than 2 million of plum. In 2014, there was a sharp increase of more than 4 million in the number of strawberry and remained the highest figure in the chart. The figure for raspberry and grape rose more than 2 million and around 4 million respectively. At the same time, plum saw a significant fell to only 0, while the number of cherry grew slowly of about 1 million
The chart graph compares
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for the sales of five
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of jam by strawberry, raspberry,
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, cherry and plum from 2009 to 2014.

Overall
, it is
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that the quantity of strawberry was by far highest during the research period.
Additionally
, while plum declined, the
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for raspberry,
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and cherry all increased.

In 2009, the number of strawberry jam was highest, at more than 3
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, while the
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for cherry was
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lower, at 2
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. At the same time, there were less than 3
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of raspberry.
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the
quantity of
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was
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compared to fewer than 2
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of plum.

In 2014, there was a sharp increase of more than 4
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in the number of strawberry and remained the highest
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in the chart. The
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for raspberry and
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rose more than 2
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and around 4
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respectively
. At the same time, plum
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a significant fell to
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0, while the number of cherry grew
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IELTS academic The chart graph compares figure for the sales of five different of jam

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