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The chart delineates the step–by–step production of creating sugar from the sugar cane.

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The chart delineates the step–by–step production of creating sugar from the sugar cane. Overall, it is patently obvious that there are seven prominent stages in this process, initiating with growing the sugar canes, and ending up in drying and cooling. Looking at the initial stages in more detail, we can see that the process commences by raising the sugar canes over a period of 12-18 months. Later on, they are gathered either manually or by agronomic machinery. Following by, the stubbles are crushed in a grinder and transformed into juice. Turning to the second phase, the liquid is purified by a limestone filter and then poured into an evaporator where it is heated, so the juice is converted into syrup. Penultimate, the separation of sugar crystals from the syrup is directed by using a centrifuge. The step is completed when the sugar is dried and cooled
The chart delineates the step–by–step production of creating
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sugar
from the
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sugar
cane.

Overall
, it is
patently
obvious that there are seven prominent stages in this process, initiating with growing the
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sugar
canes, and ending up in drying and cooling.

Looking at the initial stages in more detail, we can
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see
that the process commences by raising the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
canes over a period of 12-18 months. Later on, they
are gathered
either
manually
or by agronomic machinery. Following by, the
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stubbles
are crushed
in a grinder and transformed into juice.

Turning to the second phase, the liquid
is purified
by a limestone filter and then poured into an evaporator where it
is heated
,
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so
the juice
is converted
into syrup. Penultimate, the separation of
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sugar
crystals from the syrup
is directed
by using a centrifuge. The step
is completed
when the
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sugar
is dried
and
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cooled
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IELTS academic The chart delineates the step–by–step production of creating sugar from the sugar cane.

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145 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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