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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. RN5WY
The given bar graph illustrates the amount of capital earned through a country’s export in different categories for a period of one year (2015-2016). The table provides the data for the percentage change in each category during the same period. Overall, it can be observed that profit was more in 2016 as compared to the previous year with “gems and jewelry” as an exception. While petroleum products and engineering goods lead to the maximum capital during the two-year period, textiles and agricultural products were on the lower side of the graph. Looking closely at the graph and table, we can notice that petroleum products increased 3% more in 2016 which improved the earnings from $60 billion to $64 billion. Similarly, engineering goods recorded an 8. 5% profit increasing the amount from $56 billion to $62 billion. Meanwhile, textiles contributed to nearly half of the previous two categories but had a noticeable jump of 15. 24% moving from $25 to $32 billion. Lastly, the only category recording a loss of 5. 18% was gems and jewelry, shifting from $43 to $41 billion.
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lead to the maximum capital during the two-year period, textiles and agricultural products were on the lower side of the graph.

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recorded an 8. 5% profit increasing the amount from $56
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to $62
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recording a loss of 5. 18% was gems and jewelry, shifting from $43 to $41
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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