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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. 565Ne
The line graph provides information about the percentage of the population that is more than 65-year-old in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it can be observed that the levels of the aging population for these three countries are showing an upward trend at different stages, till 2040. In 1940, percentages of the aged people were less than 10% of the population for these three countries. Between 1960 to 1980, the USA and Sweden’s aging population rose by 5 %, while this figure for Japan dropped slightly to reach around 3%. However, after 1990, the Japanese ageing population continued to go up. This figure is projected to increase steeply after 2030. By 2040, old people in Japan will have reached more than one-quarter of the total population. In contrast, the number of aged persons in the USA had remained stable at around 15% until 2020. At the end of the period, the proportion of the elderly population in Sweden and the USA will show 25% and 23% respectively.
The line graph provides information about the percentage of the
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population
that is
more than 65-year-
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old
in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040.

Overall
, it can
be observed
that the levels of the aging
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population
for these three countries are showing an upward trend at
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different
stages, till 2040.

In 1940, percentages of the aged
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people
were less than 10% of the
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population
for these three countries.
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Between 1960 to 1980
, the USA and Sweden’s aging
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population
rose by 5 %, while this figure for Japan dropped
slightly
to reach around 3%.
However
, after 1990, the Japanese
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ageing
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population
continued to go up. This figure
is projected
to increase
steeply
after 2030. By 2040,
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old
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people
in Japan will have reached more than one-quarter of the total
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population
.
In contrast
, the number of aged persons in the USA had remained stable at around 15% until 2020. At the
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end
of the period, the proportion of the elderly
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population
in Sweden and the USA will
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show
25% and 23%
respectively
.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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