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the line graph shows the percentage of people passing computer tests in Country A over a period of 8 years.

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The graph illustrates the percentage of people passing computer test over a period of 8 years in Country A. Overall, the pass rate in theory test was 65% in 2007/08 which was highest rate over the given time. People passed in practical test was at its lowest level 50%. After 2008/09 the percentage of passing students in theory exam began to decrease. However, the passing rate in practical exam was increase over the period of time. Passing rate in theoretical exam was gradually fall after 2008/09. It was on its peak level 65% in year 2008 to 2009. After this it accounted below 60% in year 2012/13. There was extreme fall recorded in year 2014/15 at 51%. The rate of passing in practical exam is opposite to theoretical. In 2007/08 it was 50%. However, the rate began to rise. In 2012/13 it was remain same at 54%. After this it was again drop at 53% but it again raised and accounted at 56%.
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over a period of 8 years in Country A.

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in theory
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was 65% in 2007/08 which was
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over the
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passed in practical
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was at its lowest level 50%.
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2008/09 the percentage of
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students in theory exam began to decrease.
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, the
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passing
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rate
in practical exam was increase over the period of time.

Passing
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in theoretical exam was
gradually
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after 2008/09. It was on its peak level 65% in
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2008 to 2009.
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this it accounted below 60% in
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2012/13. There was extreme fall recorded in
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2014/15 at 51%.

The
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of
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passing
in practical exam is opposite to theoretical. In 2007/08 it was 50%.
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began to rise. In 2012/13 it was
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same at 54%. After this it was again
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at 53%
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it again raised and accounted at 56%.
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IELTS academic the line graph shows the percentage of people passing computer tests in Country A over a period of 8 years.

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