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the chart below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between 1993 and 1999.

the chart below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between 1993 and 1999. pjwd
The line graph illustrates data about the percentages of unemployment rates between Japan and USA from 1993 to 1999. It is clear that the unemployment rates in the USA was much higher than japan. In USA the rate of unemployment constantly decreasing in each year, when the japan overtook it. Howeve, the trend in japan suddenly increased in the year of 1996 to 1999. In the beginning of the 1993, the percentage of workforce was te highest, at 7%, in the USA. Following the next couple of years the uemployment fall to 5% and from 1995 to 1998 the trend of unemployment was remained stable, until 1999 when it came 4% of workforce. In japan, on the other hand, the trend was constantly increasing. Bewteen 1993 and 1996 the percentage of workforce rose 2% to 3% and over the next four years, the unemployment rates in japan inflate its peak into 5%. At the end of the time period the rate of the unemployment in both country USA and japan had the same percentages of works.
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IELTS academic the chart below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between 1993 and 1999.

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