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The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. mxBL
The first diagram illustrates how cement is produced, and the second diagram presents the concrete mixing with cement, water, sand, and graver. At the first stage of cement production limestone and clay mixed together into the crusher and it becomes powder. After that, the powder heated in the rotating heater machine and it passes through the mixer. During the following stage, those heated powders, which is a mixture of limestone and clay placed in a grinder machine. Once, it ground in a grinder machine, and the final product is cement. The process ends with the packaging cement in large bags. The concrete procedures begin with the combination of four different materials, which are 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand, and 50% Garver(small stones). As can be seen that the production of concrete goes through simple steps with few elements which are consist of building purpose. The last difference between cement and concrete production is that concrete mixing does not go through hitting procedures.
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first
diagram illustrates how
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cement
is produced
, and the second diagram presents the concrete mixing with
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cement
, water, sand, and graver. At the
first
stage of
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cement
production limestone and clay mixed together into the crusher and it becomes powder. After that, the powder heated in the rotating heater machine and it passes through the mixer. During the following stage, those heated powders, which is a mixture of limestone and clay placed in a grinder machine. Once, it ground in a grinder machine, and the final product is
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cement
. The process ends with the packaging
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cement
in large bags. The concrete procedures
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with the combination of four
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materials, which are 15%
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, 10% water, 25% sand, and 50%
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stones).
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that the production of concrete goes through simple steps with few elements which are consist of building purpose. The last difference between
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and concrete production is that concrete mixing does not go through hitting procedures.
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IELTS academic The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

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