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The chart below shows the total amount of money (in billions) of household expenditure in the USA, divided into three categories, from 2000 to 2007.

The chart below shows the total amount of money (in billions) of household expenditure in the USA, divided into three categories, from 2000 to 2007. LrJ2G
The bar chart illustrates the information about the money spent by US residents on different types of household expenditure between 2000 and 2007. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that groceries were the most expensive of the US resident expenditure during the period stated in the question. According to the data of the groceries expenditure, the amount of spending increased from 72 billion US dollars in 2000 to well under 90 billion in 2003 US dollars. After peaking at 90 billion US dollars in the following years this expense had fallen back to 2000 figure by 2007. In addition, spending money on electricity climbed steadily from just under 40 billion to approximately 60 billion at the end of the given period, though a rise slowed over the last two years. There was significant growth in the spending on the internet from approximately 2 billion to 46 billion. This rise was particular noticeably between 2004 and 2007, and the internet increased significantly to well under 50 billion in 2007
The bar chart illustrates the information about the money spent by US residents on
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types of household expenditure between 2000 and 2007.

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from the graph that groceries were the most expensive of the US resident expenditure during the period stated in the question.

According to the data of the
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groceries
expenditure, the amount of spending increased from 72
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US dollars in 2000 to well under 90
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in 2003 US dollars.
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US dollars in the following years this expense had fallen back to 2000 figure by 2007.

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under 40
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to approximately 60
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at the
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period, though a rise slowed over the last two years. There was significant growth in the spending on the internet from approximately 2
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to 46
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. This rise was particular
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between 2004 and 2007, and the internet increased
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in 2007
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total amount of money (in billions) of household expenditure in the USA, divided into three categories, from 2000 to 2007.

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