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The charts below give information about retirement income and employment in three countries in 2017.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about retirement income and employment in three countries in 2017. 6xD8x
The given table depicts information about main sources for retirement income while the bars chart detailed percentage of people who work 2 main sector, private and public and unemployment rate in 3 various country UK, Japan, Thailand. Looking from overall perspective, it is apparent that, public pension is predominant source of income for seniors, except Thailand. Meanwhile, major percentage of adult is employed by private sector. Breaking down to further, in UK almost half of elderly population (48) receive their income from government and this percentage equal to 52 in Japan. On the contrary, In Thailand, people who are age of retirement, 41% of them receive financial assisement from their family member. The following income levels in UK are private pension and investment income which are equal to 23% and 11% respectively. However, business income are the lowest percentage for Japan and UK, whereas in Thailand, it is the second largest (18%) retirement source for income. As is observed from the bar chart, unemployment levels stand the lowest percentage in Asian countries, Japan and Thailand. In all 3 countries, most of their citizen working in private sector, which in turn equal to 56%, 62% and 51% correspondingly. In UK, only 21% of its population work in public sector, whereas in Thailand and Japan, its is second most preferred sector.
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table depicts information about main sources for retirement
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income
while the bars chart detailed
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percentage
of
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people
who work 2 main
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sector
,
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private
and public and unemployment rate in 3 various country UK,
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Japan
, Thailand.

Looking from
overall
perspective, it is apparent that, public pension is predominant source of
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income
for seniors, except Thailand. Meanwhile, major
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percentage
of adult
is employed
by
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private
sector.

Breaking down to
further
, in UK almost half of elderly population (48) receive their
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income
from
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government
and this
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percentage
equal to 52 in
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Japan
.
On the contrary
, In Thailand,
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people
who are age of retirement, 41% of them receive financial
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assisement
from their family member. The following
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income
levels in UK are
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private
pension and investment
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income
which are equal to 23% and 11%
respectively
.
However
, business
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income
are the lowest
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percentage
for
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Japan
and UK, whereas in Thailand, it is the second largest (18%) retirement source for income.

As
is observed
from the bar chart, unemployment levels stand the lowest
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percentage
in Asian countries,
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Japan
and Thailand. In all 3 countries, most of their citizen working in
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private
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sector
, which in turn equal to 56%, 62% and 51%
correspondingly
. In UK,
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only
21% of its population work in public
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sector
, whereas in Thailand and
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Japan
, its is second most preferred
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about retirement income and employment in three countries in 2017.

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