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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. ey9B
The bar chart gives information about drinking habits in 5 Australian cities as they relate to coffee and tea last 4 weeks. Firstly, Looking first of all at going to cafes, it was most characteristic of Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%. Sydney was comparably high at just over 60%, followed by Brisbane at over 55%, and finally Adelaide at under 50%. Furthermore the highest percentage of people was went to a café for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks in Melbourne. It is around 64%. and lowest percentage was around 49% in Adelaide city. Adelaide was the only city where people bought more instant coffee by around 50% Moreover, Sydeny was the highest city where people bought coffee in last 4 week. It is around 44%. Brisbane and Adelaide were people bought coffee in last 4 weeks. It is around 34% of both country Overall, more than half of the population in all cities except Adelaide went to a cafe for coffee or tea. Than buying instant coffee was also popular and buying fresh coffee generally less common.
The bar chart gives information about drinking habits in 5 Australian
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, it was most characteristic of Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%. Sydney was
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over 60%, followed by Brisbane at over 55%, and
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Adelaide at under 50%.

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or tea in last 4 weeks in Melbourne. It is
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, more than half of the population in all
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
181 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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