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The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 2YNw
The illustrated bar charts below depicts students from United kingdom who did part-time work, voluntary work, further study and unemployed after getting their degree and master's in 2008. Overall, most graduates and students who got their master’s degree from United Kingdom choose to pursue their further study in 2008 whereas others went to part-time work and least of them are volunteer workers. To begin with, 29, 665 students who graduated in 2008 choose to follow their dreams and continue to study for their career while 2, 725 postgraduate’s students did the same thing. However, 17, 735 undergraduates and 2, 535 postgraduates decide onto work as a part-time in 2008. Furthermore, 16, 235 are still unemployed after graduating from college and just around 1625 who has master’s degree are still unemployed as well. in addition to that, 3500 number of students who got their diploma decided to volunteer on other works rather than to be in a full time position while 345 post graduates choose their career as an unpaid worker.
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IELTS academic The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008

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