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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Given is a bar graph showing how often people buying and drinking coffee and tea changed in five cities in Australia. The main feature we can see from the graph is that the people who live in Melbourne are most enjoyed their beverage in cafe among other four cities. Turning to the detail, as the most percentages of people went to a cafe for coffee or tea in 4 weeks, Melbourne citizens recorded at about 63%. The rate of both Hobart and Sydney residents showed similar figures, around 63% and just over 61%, respectively. People who live in Adelaide answered that only about 49% of people went to a cafe for coffee or tea during last 4 weeks. As to the rest answers from city residents

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