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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. y3eJ
The chart gives information about the fraction of Brighton University’s graduate entering different employment sectors in year 2019. Overall, vast majority of students work for service and manufacturing industries after completing their university study. From the chart above, we can see that service industry is the most popular field among graduates, with over one-third of students working in this sector. Manufacturing field and education sector has a similar percentage of graduates, with the figure of 16. 3% and 14. 7% respectively. Nonetheless, slightly above one-tenth of the school’s graduates work for the politics and government sector. The percentage of graduates that choose to enter transportation and warehousing industry is almost identical to science and technology, with a marginal difference of 0. 5%. Only one in every one-hundred student choose to enter the sport industry, making it the least popular sector. Other graduates from the university work as civil servants (5. 6%) and charity workers (0. 3%), and 2. 8% of the graduates have other jobs.
The chart gives information about the fraction of Brighton University’s
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is the most popular field among
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, with over one-third of students working in this
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. Manufacturing field and education
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has a similar percentage of
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graduates
, with the figure of 16. 3% and 14. 7%
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. Nonetheless,
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work for the politics and
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sector.

The percentage of
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graduates
that choose to enter transportation and warehousing
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industry
is almost identical to science and technology, with a marginal difference of 0. 5%.
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sector
. Other
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from the university work as civil servants (5. 6%) and charity workers (0. 3%), and 2. 8% of the
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have other jobs.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

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