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The bar chart details drinking habits in 5 Australian cities as they relate to coffee and tea over the last 4 weeks.

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The bar chart details drinking habits in 5 Australian cities as they relate to coffee and tea over the last 4 weeks. Overall, more than half the population in all cities except Adelaide went to a cafe for coffee or tea, while buying instant coffee was also popular and buying fresh coffee generally less common. Looking first of all at going to cafes, it was most characteristic of Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%, respectively. Sydney was comparably high at just over 60%, followed by Brisbane at over 55%, and finally Adelaide at under 50%. Adelaide was the only city where people bought more instant coffee by a slight margin (50%). In Hobart, instant coffee purchases stood at 54%, ahead of Brisbane at 52%, Melbourne at 48% and lastly Sydney (just over 45%). Stocking up on fresh coffee was below 45% for all cities. It was most common in Sydney (44%) and Melbourne (42%). Hobart was next at 39%, and Adelaide and Brisbane were much lower and nearly level at around 34%.
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drinking habits in 5 Australian
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cities
as they relate to
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coffee
and tea
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over
the last 4 weeks.
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, more than half the population in all
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cities
except Adelaide went to a
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cafe
for
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or tea, while buying instant
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was
also
popular and buying fresh
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generally
less common.

Looking
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at going to
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, it was most characteristic of Melbourne and Hobart at 64% and 63%,
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. Sydney was
comparably
high at
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60%, followed by Brisbane at
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55%, and
finally
Adelaide at under 50%. Adelaide was the
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only
city where
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people
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bought
more instant
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coffee
by a slight margin (50%). In Hobart, instant
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coffee
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purchases
stood at 54%, ahead of Brisbane at 52%, Melbourne at 48% and
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Sydney (
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45%).

Stocking up on fresh
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coffee
was below 45% for all
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cities
. It was most common in Sydney (44%) and Melbourne (42%). Hobart was
next
at 39%, and Adelaide and Brisbane were much lower and
nearly
level at around 34%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart details drinking habits in 5 Australian cities as they relate to coffee and tea over the last 4 weeks.

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