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The chart below shows the proportion of immigrant from different regions and countries working in Australia in 1991.

The chart below shows the proportion of immigrant from different regions and countries working in Australia in 1991. BlNyV
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of immigrant workforce of six different regions in Australia in 1991. Overall, it is clear from the chart that the majority of the immigrant workers came from Europe. Asian and New Zealanders also made up a significant percentage, while only a relatively small proportion of workers were from other regions. the majority of the foreign workers came from Europe. In fact, nearly two thirds were of European origin. The second largest group of foreign workers in the labor force were Asians. They represented just under a fifth of the immigrant labor workforce. New Zealanders, who made up almost a tenth of the foreign workforce in that year, were the third largest group. The percentage of workers from other countries was much smaller. Workers from North Africa and the Middle East, for example, were only four percent of the whole foreign labor force. The smallest nationality group, however, were Americans, These represented just three percent of all the foreign workers in Australia in 1991.
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regions in Australia in 1991.

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from the chart that the majority of the immigrant
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came from Europe. Asian and New Zealanders
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were from other regions.

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foreign
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came from Europe. In fact,
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two thirds were of European origin. The second largest group of
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in the labor force were Asians. They represented
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under a fifth of the immigrant labor workforce. New Zealanders, who made up almost a tenth of the
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workforce in that year, were the third largest group.

The percentage of
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from other countries was much smaller.
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from North Africa and the Middle East,
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four percent of the whole
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labor force. The smallest nationality group,
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, were Americans, These represented
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three percent of all the
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in Australia in 1991.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the proportion of immigrant from different regions and countries working in Australia in 1991.

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