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The given bar graph shows the percentage of adults of different age groups using the internet between 2003 and 2006, in the Great Britain. The over 65+ had the least percentage of the internet users. The maximum users of the internet were the young adults aged between 16 and 24 years. In 2003 and 2004 they shared the same percentage, which I was 80%. In 2005, it inclined to 100%, but again decreased to 90% in the next year. We can see from the chart that all the age group experienced an upward trend as far as the daily use of internet is concerned. In the 25-44 group, there was a gradual growth in the percentage, from 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006. There was similar increase for the 45 to 54 year old’s, rising from 60% in 2003 to 80% in 2006. As for the other two groups, although the percentages had minor fluctuations, the overall trend was upwards. Overall, adults between 16-24 showed the greatest usage of the internet and the users grew with time regardless of their age.

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 the greatest usage of the internet and the users grew with time regardless of their age. 