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The chart below shows the percentage of employment categories of adult population

The chart below shows the percentage of employment categories of adult population 5akAV

This bar chart illustrates seven categories of adult citizens in two specific years which are 2003 and 2013. Overall, it is easy to see a sudden increase in the population of self employed after ten years, while the business recorded a dramatic decrease. Moreover, only three employment categories decreased since their percentage in 2003 ( medical, business and unemployed) According to what is shown, in 2013 both education training and hotel industry were almost at the same percentage at 18 percent. Furthermore, the proportion of building in 2013 was two times the percentage in 2003 at 20 percent and 10 percent respectively. In addition, in 2013 the highest percentage among all the categories was business at about 46%, but then it went down significantly. On the other hand, the lowest percentage in the same year was hotel industry at approximately 4%. To sum up, we could say that it is obvious in 2013 all types of employment were bigger than in 2003.

This bar chart illustrates seven categories of adult citizens in two specific years which are 2003 and 2013.

Overall
, it is easy to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 a sudden increase in the population of This word is normally spelled with hyphen.self-employed
self employed
 after ten years, while the business recorded a dramatic decrease. Moreover
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 three employment categories decreased since their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 in 2003 Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis(
( 
medical, business and unemployed)

According to what is shown
, in 2013 both education training and hotel industry were almost at the same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 at 18 percent. Furthermore
, the proportion of building in 2013 was two times the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 in 2003 at 20 percent and 10 percent respectively
. In addition
, in 2013 the highest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 among all the categories was business at about 46%, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 then it went down significantly
. On the other hand
, the lowest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 in the same year was hotel industry at approximately 4%.

To sum up, we could say that it is obvious in 2013 all types of employment were bigger than in 2003. 