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Cinemas visit of all of ages

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The table illustrates the yearly percentage of the population and average annual visits of person to the cinema, whereas the line graph compares cinema visits of different age groups from 1996 to 2000 in Australia. Overall, The attendance of the population increased, whereas the average annual visits had a declining trend. Similarly, The young generation was the highest fond and the older age group was least fond of visiting the theatre. In 1996, 62% of the population used to visit in cinema which found a drastic change in 1997 at 72%. After that trend was nearly similar to 2000 with 72%. The average annual visits were also seen an increase between 1996 and 1997 from 10. 3 to 11. 1, which further dropped to an average 8. 3 till 2000. Also, The young age from 14 to 49 showed the highest interest than the old age (50+) in the entire five years of period. Besides this, All ages followed a similar trend to visit the cinemas. In 1996, The visits of all ages were between 10 to 15, which also fluctuated differently every year.

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