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The chart below shows the number of travelers Railway journeys made in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/05.

The chart below shows the number of travelers Railway journeys made in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/05. PM9yK

Between 1960 and 1980 the National rail network numbers of travelers plunge sharply from approximately 1125 to 800 million travelers. In this period of time the same goes for London Underground also bottoming out. After that, both started to increase gradually and steady, with the 1980s and 2000s seeing the sharpest increase. The National rail network reaches a high in 2004/5 at an approximately 1100 million travelers. The London Underground also hit a peek at this period of time, reaching about 980 millions passengers. However, the light rail and systems carried fewer passengers than the other two. Although it doesn't carry a lot of people throughout the years it still rises steadily. The number of trips made by passengers pick up, reaching nearly 200 million at the year 2004/5

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 at the year 2004/5

IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of travelers Railway journeys made in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/05.

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