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The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals on reasons for choosing a university.

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A survey of young students about factors for choosing a university shown in the bar chart. In general, there was a significantly difference in the percentage of 11 groups for choosing a university. Actually, language of tution is the most common reason for a university choice; however, the lowest choice belonged to the good language support. It obvious that the cause for choosing a university shown can be divided into three group, namely below 30%, between 30% and 70% and above 70%. Firstly, about 95% of students agree that language of tution was the deciding factor for a university choice, followed by the quality of teachers and up-to-date teaching facilities, with 5% less. Meanwhile, cost of accommodation made up 80% of the total, and 75% belonged to cost of tution. Secondly, location and reputation took the lion’s share with the same proportion of 70% in the 30%-70% group. Friendliness and good preparation for work comes next in the chart with less than 5%, specifically 65%. In the end, modern teaching methods are chosen by 30% of students, a rather small number. Undoubtedly, good language support is the least concern causes with only 20%.
A survey of young students about factors for choosing a
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shown in the bar chart.

In general
, there was a
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significantly difference
in the percentage of 11 groups for choosing a
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university
. Actually,
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language
of
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tution
is the most common reason for a
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university
choice;
however
, the lowest choice belonged to the
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good
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language
support.
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It
obvious that the cause for choosing a
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university
shown can
be divided
into three group,
namely
below 30%, between 30% and 70% and above 70%.

Firstly
, about 95% of students
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agree
that
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language
of
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tution
was the deciding factor for a
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university
choice, followed by the quality of teachers and up-to-date teaching facilities, with 5% less. Meanwhile, cost of accommodation made up 80% of the total, and 75% belonged to cost of
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tution
.

Secondly
, location and reputation took the lion’s share with the same proportion of 70% in the 30%-70% group. Friendliness and
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good
preparation for work
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comes
next
in the chart with less than 5%,
specifically
65%.

In the
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end
, modern teaching methods
are chosen
by 30% of students, a
rather
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small
number.
Undoubtedly
,
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good
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support is the least concern causes with
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only
20%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals on reasons for choosing a university.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
193 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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