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The chart below shows the number of japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and australia's share of the japanese tourist market.

The chart below shows the number of japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and australia's share of the japanese tourist market. 83wl

The chart shows the percentage of people coming to australia and the total of japanese tourists travelling foreign in the middle of 1985 and 1995. Overall, there is an increased growth of passengers travelling aboard and reaches highest at the end of the year which is same as the proportion shifting to australia. The figure shows some fluctuations in migrating to various places. In the begining only a few people of about 5million are moving in the year 85 and there is an increase of around 1 - 1. 5 million in next successive 5 years reached 11millions in the year 1990. In 90 it reached nearly 12million in 92 prior to drop out of about 1million in 91. Again there is an gradual grew in the next 3 years finally reached 15million in 95. Figure2 depicts, an exact of 2% of japan individuals are proceeding to go to australia prior to 0% before the year 85. There is a rise in the successive 3 years of about 1. 5%, fell down of 0. 5% in 89 before reaching to more than 6% in the year 93. Finally an 6% are going to australia in the year 94.

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