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The chart below shows the main reasons for study among students of different ages and the support they get in terms of fees and time.

The chart below shows the main reasons for study among students of different ages and the support they get in terms of fees and time. wO7nl
The given bar chart illustrates the main reason for study among students of different ages and the pie chart illustrates the supports they get in terms of money and time. To begin with, the bar evaluate 3 different reason in five different age group. Firstly, the under 26 age group has 65% main reason is for career which was highest in the this reason while in remaining two reason interest and promotion has been contributed 10% and 20% respectively. Secondly, 26-35 aged people's main reason behind study to got promotion so, 60% individual studying for this reason. Moreover, 35-45 aged people main two reasons were motivated to study which was for promotion and for interest both contributed 40% respectively. Additionally, 45-60 aged pubilc's main reason was for interest so it has been accounted 60%. Furthermore, 60 and above aged person has main motive to study were interest so it has been accounted 90% which was highest under this reason. In addition, pei chart illustrates the support in terms of fees and time off. so in this situation under 26 aged group were highest contributed by 60% because that is main where this group spend their whole time and pay handsome fee for study. while other aged group has been accounted 20%, 10%, 5%, and 5% by 26-35, 35-45, 45-60, and 60 & above respectively. Overall, whole information illustrates that different aged have different motivetion to do their study and also different aged individual spend their time and money according their age.
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has 65%
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the main reasons for study among students of different ages and the support they get in terms of fees and time.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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