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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. DRQA
The bar graph provides information about rate changes in the post-school qualification in australia and the ratio of males and females in the year 1999. Overall, it is cleared from the chart. Males are more qualifications than the females. The ratio of female in skilled vocational diploma only 10% than the male are more eligibility is 90%, female is less qualifications on skilled vocational diploma. However the percentage of female who had undergraduate diploma was 70% and compare to the male around 35% on this qualification men are lower undergraduate diploma. On the bachelor's degree male are about 45%, but female is jump on the 50% more qualification on bachelor's degree. Australian people who had after-school qualifications, some females doing postgraduate diploma almost 30% and men's doing more postgraduate diploma it is 70% comparing to the females. The percentage of males holding master's degree was one-fifth higher than females constituting 40%.
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constituting 40%.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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