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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. lykw
The illustrations details about the International and Local students admission in Australian universities. Overall it has been found that, within the 10 years time frame Local students are higher in total numbers than International students and the number of International students are increasing. The number of total Local students hit the highest peak in year 2008 and it was near about 600000. However, total umber of foreign students was highest in 2009 and it was near about eighty one thousands. From the graph, the trend line of total foreign students was upward trending. On the other side, the trend line of Local students was upward trending but from year 2007 it was running at constant linear shape. Interestingly, the number of currrent Local students were decreased which was dropped to 200000 in year 2010, on the contrary the number of current International students in Australian universities were increased which was near about 41 thousands in year 2010.
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admission in Australian universities.
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are increasing.

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hit the highest peak in
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2008 and it was near about 600000.
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umber of foreign
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was highest in 2009 and it was near about eighty
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. From the graph, the trend line of
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was upward trending. On the other side, the trend line of
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Local
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was upward trending
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from
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2007 it was running at constant linear shape.

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currrent
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2010,
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in Australian universities
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2010.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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