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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012 mQjq
The given line graph depicts a cumbersome scenario about information of variations in three distinct types of thefts in Manchester city center over a period of ten years from the year of 2003. It can be analysed from the data that, robbery was the least committed crime throughout the timeline and remained consolidated with equivalent number of cases in the initial and final year of the time span. Likewise, car theft showed a fluctuating graph up-to the first half of the decade, thereafter it upsurged in the second half. Moreover, an abstruse situation was that burglary remained the most perpetrated crime till 2006 among the three, and then it significantly de-escalated to intersect with the car theft by the mid of 2006. Thereafter, car theft was the maximally attempted crime till the end of the decennial. To abbreviate, it can be stated that, burglary and robbery showed a downtrend over the time scale, whereas, car theft appeared to have a minor uptrend. Also, the law enforcement bodies showed kosher efforts during the year of 2008 when acute number of thefts took place in the city, and in the meantime, burglary had shown a cavernous plunge of above three times over a leap year's time.
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in Manchester city center over a period of ten years from the
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of 2003.

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of the
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car
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theft
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showed
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half of the decade, thereafter it upsurged in the second half.

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car
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by the mid of 2006. Thereafter,
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car
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was the
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end
of the decennial.

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showed
a downtrend over the
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time
scale, whereas,
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car
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theft
appeared to have a minor uptrend.
Also
, the law enforcement bodies
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showed
kosher efforts during the
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year
of 2008 when acute number of
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thefts
took place in the city, and in the meantime, burglary had shown a cavernous plunge of above three
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times
over a leap year's
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.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012

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