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the given bar graph illustrates the information about the feud in the transport sector in various vi notions in your country with compared to the you every from 2009 to 2010

the given bar graph illustrates the information about the feud in the transport sector in various vi notions in your country with compared to the you every from 2009 to 2010 dBW7
The given bar graph illustrates the information about used the fuel in the transport sector in various notions in Europe compared with to the EU averagefrom 2009 to 2010. Overview, people of the Slovakia were used highest percentage of fuel. However, Greece people were utilised the fuel at lowest ratio in transport sector. To begin with, in 2009, the people of Slovakia City were used near about 9% oil for transport sector. But, in the next year(2010), only 5. 6 % of people used fuel as compared to the EU average. It was increased by 3 time double in 2009 and 1. 5 time in 2010. The fuel used in the Italy and France was with the same proportion that was 4. 5%, 5. 2 %, 3. 8 % and 4. 2%, respectively in both years as compared to the EU average this two countries use less fuel. Australia people were used fuel for transport which remains same in the both years with 5. 2%. Spain people were utilised the fuel in transport sector that was 3. 9% and 3. 2%. On the contrary, only Greece city masses was used lowest percentage of fuel, it was near about 1% and two percentage in 2009 and 2010, respectively. As compared to you have range grease used less fuel for transport system.
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of the Slovakia were
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.
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, Greece
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people
were
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the
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fuel
at lowest ratio in
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transport
sector.

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begin
with, in 2009, the
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of Slovakia City were
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used
near about 9% oil for
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transport
sector.
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, in the
next
year(2010),
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5. 6 % of
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people
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used
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fuel
as compared to the EU average. It
was increased
by 3 time double in 2009 and 1. 5 time in 2010. The
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fuel
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used
in the Italy and France was with the same proportion that was 4. 5%, 5. 2 %, 3. 8 % and 4. 2%,
respectively
in both years as compared to the EU average this two countries
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use
less fuel.

Australia
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people
were
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used
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fuel
for
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transport
which remains same in the both years with 5. 2%. Spain
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people
were
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utilised
the
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fuel
in
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transport
sector that was 3. 9% and 3. 2%.
On the contrary
,
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Greece city masses was
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used
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lowest
percentage of
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fuel
, it was near about 1% and two percentage in 2009 and 2010,
respectively
. As compared to you have range grease
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used
less
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fuel
for
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transport
system.

IELTS academic the given bar graph illustrates the information about the feud in the transport sector in various vi notions in your country with compared to the you every from 2009 to 2010

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