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The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales(in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the yearly rentals and marketing of movies over one store during the year 2002 and 2011. From the graph, It is clear that DVD sales rose significantly over the period 2002 since, 2007. But, there is a slight decline next few years till 2011. As shown that DVD sales rose, there is a dramatical decrease in rentals from 1, 85, 000 annually to 68, 000 till 2011. In 2002, VHS sales start over 85, 000 approximately, but it goes on declining till 2005 up to 10, 000. After that, VHS sales are not seen further. Later, In 2007, the mart starts Blu-ray sales with a few sales of 5000. That rapidly moves and slows a slight increase each year and improved its sales to 60, 000 till 2011. It is clear that DVD sales is most among all others and later, it started Blu-ray sales for there growth in bussiness.
The graph illustrates the yearly rentals and marketing of movies over one store during the year 2002 and 2011. From the graph, It is
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to 60, 000 till 2011. It is
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is most among all others and later, it
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for there growth in
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales(in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 to 2011.

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