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the chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia.write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

the chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. k36R
The bar graph describes how 5 to 14 year children in Australia engage themselves during free time. It is clear that boys are involved more in leisure activities instead of girls. It is evident that one third of boys engage in bike riding whereas 60% of girls ride bike in free time. In addition, four fifth of boys play electronic games and, three fifth of girls involve in electronic and computer games. Similarly, the percentage of boys and girls that play rollerblading is 40% and 30% respectively. The majority of proportion of children are interested in watching television which accounts same for both the sexes which is 100% consecutively. On the other hand, art and craft is more popular among girls with more than half of the prpotion while, boys is about 40%. The bar graph describes how 5 to 14 year children in Australia engage themselves during free time. it is clear that boys are involved more in leisure activities instead of girls. It is evident that one third of boys engage in bike riding whereas 60% of girls ride bike in free time. In addition, four fifth of boys play electronic games and, three fifth of girls involve in electronic and computer games. Similarly, the percentage of boys and girls that play rollerblading is 40% and 30% respectively. The majority of proportion of children are interested in watching television which accounts same for both the sexes which is 100% consecutively. On the other hand, art and craft is more popular among girls with more than half of the prpotion while, boys is about 40%.
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children
in Australia
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engage
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free
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time
. It is
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that
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boys
are involved
more in leisure activities
instead
of girls.

It is evident that one third of
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boys
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engage
in
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bike
riding whereas 60% of
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girls
ride
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bike
in
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free
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time
.
In addition
, four fifth of
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boys
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play
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electronic
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games
and, three fifth of
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girls
involve in
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electronic
and computer
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games
.
Similarly
, the percentage of
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boys
and
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girls
that
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play rollerblading
is 40% and 30%
respectively
.

The majority of proportion of
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children
are interested
in watching television which accounts same for both the sexes which is 100%
consecutively
.

On the other hand
, art and craft is more popular among
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girls
with more than half of the
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prpotion
while,
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boys
is about 40%.

The bar graph
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describes
how 5 to 14 year
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children
in Australia
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engage
themselves during
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free
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time
.
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it
is
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clear
that
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boys
are involved
more in leisure activities
instead
of girls.

It is evident that one third of
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boys
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engage
in
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bike
riding whereas 60% of
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girls
ride
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bike
in
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free
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time
.
In addition
, four fifth of
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boys
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play
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electronic
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games
and, three fifth of
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girls
involve in
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electronic
and computer
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games
.
Similarly
, the percentage of
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boys
and
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girls
that
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go rollerblading".
play rollerblading
is 40% and 30%
respectively
.

The majority of proportion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are interested
in watching television which accounts same for both the sexes which is 100%
consecutively
.

On the other hand
, art and craft is more popular among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
with more than half of the
Possible spelling mistake found.
prpotion
while,
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boys
is about 40%.
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IELTS academic the chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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